Zhasmene's Cinquain
Sleep
Calmly
In my bed
Fluffy warm blankets
To refresh my weary soul
Because I need it more than anything
posted by zhasmene @ 12:27 AM
3 comments
Sleep
Calmly
In my bed
Fluffy warm blankets
To refresh my weary soul
Because I need it more than anything
posted by zhasmene @ 12:27 AM
3 comments
3 Comments:
This looks good, but I wonder if there should be a comma between "fluffy" and "warm" because you could say "fluffy and warm blankets."
It's a little unclear which subject "it" is referring to in the last line, but this poem has nice imagery and is very relatable.
Great topic! I think we all can identify with needing more sleep, and I liked the way you worded this poem.
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