Writing Commons Two: Dalicia's Cinquain

Tuesday, May 04, 2010

Breathing
Frantically
Into you
The breath of life
To bring you back
Yet I have failed you

At 7:01 PM, Marissa said...: I really like the flow of this. It makes for an interesting and complex sentence and so many emotions can be felt in such a short time.
At 7:18 PM, Leebers said...: I agree with Marissa, this is a very emotional poem, even if it is short. Very well done and well thought out