Cinquain
Thinking
At the beach
Beneath the stars
Tonight
To gaze at my choices of my life
Until the daylight shines threw, and all along I always knew.
posted by Mikala @ 12:27 AM
2 comments
Friday, May 09, 2008
Thinking
At the beach
Beneath the stars
Tonight
To gaze at my choices of my life
Until the daylight shines threw, and all along I always knew.
2 Comments:
First, I like the rhythm of this poem. Adding "Tonight" in the middle of the poem makes it more dramatic. And second, in the last line, "threw" should be "through."
oh duh! Thank you!
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